6. Feedback


Tutor feedback, 3rd December 2022

Overall Feedback

I took a look at your site here …

…to remind me of your work and to consider the presentation of information to see and get a ‘feel’ of how it presents your work. As we have discussed before it is very heavy on the text and analysis – which is fine as that seems to be where you concentrated your effort. Of course, the visualisations run alongside etc.

To be honest it’s difficult to navigate through [1] – this maybe partly is due to many forces at play. Given the ways in which we process information online, the very nature of a flat screen means that it’s very easy to think of the screen as a kind of typewriter – a textual version of a paper document – and that means that many people use it as such – of course, it’s not the case in terms of design and creating a visual coherence with an aesthetic.

Therefore I would encourage you if you can to consider how you can show your work more visually [2] and present your intellectual enquiry in a way that is not overwhelming for a viewer or assessor. You should ask yourself the question – about the practical nature when anyone looks at work -online – especially as an artist – etc.

So, for example, a critic might spend a whole day or morning reviewing someone’s work– perhaps they are familiar so they will have already formed an opinion – perhaps not, but the element of time in any review is key – so clarity and editing to the key points are paramount.
Remind yourself where the highlighting is and if its something you want to point to? Feedback on assignment 5…is an example

Your personal reflectivity is sometimes masked by the way you express yourself in your writing, the analytic attention and care you take to be precise might in some way act as a barrier to an appreciation for the visual elements you create

I’m not so sure about this statement (below) …are you really saying that the whole module is faulty? [3]

there is a corresponding disapproval of
depicting the sublime, the beautiful and the picturesque in the genre.

In conclusion, it all seems pretty good and explains your critical approach – take care to make sure that the assessors can see the work – the visual work… amongst the writing and analysis. [2]

Halfway down this page
there is some good use of imagery – if you are able I would advise adding or increasing the presence of imagery throughout where possible [2].

Feedback based on Learning Outcomes
L01 Visual and conceptual strategies
Developed strong conceptual elements that offer frameworks for visual elements.

L02 Social, cultural and ethical consideration
Many elements draw upon a sense of deconstructing the approaches to subject within specific areas.

L03 Exploring a range of ideas
The range of ideas is expressed in the text – some are realised in camera [2]

L04 Research, managing time and resources
The research and methodologies employed are critical and focused with less emphasis on the visual elements [2].

L05 Autonomy, voice and communication
Independence is shown throughout.

Action points

This might be a bit obvious but it is pretty accurate – visuality and design principles.

This site has some good links to the ways in which we appreciate good design.



4th December

1 To be honest it’s difficult to navigate through

The main site is intentionally labyrinthine because that is the way I like web sites but the sub domains, in this case lpe.baphot.co.uk is supposed to be austere and easy to navigate for Assessment purposes. All the course Exercises and all the Assignments are laid out to see and I submit a list for Assessors of suggested links in support of the various Learning Outcomes. And yet every tutor has told me they don’t like it.
Read the room : it isn’t working. But I am still mystified.

2Various above.

More images, fewer words. Noted.

3 are you really saying that the whole module is faulty?

Not at all.

The course is interesting and informative but also incomplete. The course material criticises picturesque photography and praises politically activist photography, both points of view I happen to concur with. But it also largely ignores apolitical, representative landscape photography, which is, again in my view, an entirely legitimate and worthwhile area of practice.